Semester Standards-Based Digital Portfolio Assessment Athena sandY

Showing proficiency in:


Present information, findings,and supporting evidence clearly, concisely, and Logically such that listeners can follow the line of reasoning and the organization, development, substance, and style are appropriate to purpose, audience, and task.

In many of my essays, my evidence is shown in order, and grouped with similar evidence or grouped in such away that it flows with the reader.

"Eugenics encourage the segregation of humans based on things that they cannot control. Racism will skyrocket, homophobia and ablesim, xenophobia and a refusal to be educated on different cultures. Without other cultures influencing our own, and diversity being firmly integrated into our society, genocide is inevitable. Hatred is inevitable. Intolerance is inevitable. One should not stand by as fellow humans are being murdered for characteristics that when integrated into our society make it better."

As you can see, I clearly state as to why eugenics should not be enforced. "Racism will skyrocket,". With such blunt and concise statements, one cannot help but be enthralled by my superior syntax. There is no beating around the bush and nothing left to question. It is clear that racism is bad, which has been shown throughout history, and it is clear that eugenics is going to bring nothing but.



Acquire and use accurately general academic and domain-specific words and phrases , sufficient for reading, writing, speaking, and listening at the college and career readiness level; demonstrate independence in gathering vocabulary knowledge when comdiswromh a word or phrase important to comprehension or expression.

Many of my trashed essay beginnings show incredibly proficient vocabulary. As shown below:

"This is a powerful passage because of the incredibly subtle syntax and well written romanticism. The long quotes, with breaths of emotion tangled within each comma. The sentence structure shows how his emotions are..."

As you can see, I am my vocabulary in this is unmatched, although unfortunately, I was unable to use this beginning as it didn't match the rest of the essay.



Cite strong and thorough textual evidence to support analysis of what the text says explicitly as well as inferences drawn from the text.

How ever often I may need to, and however confinement it may be, I really don't like to quote and cite evidence. Similar to my IR essay, for that last two paragraphs, I didn't cite evidence whatsoever.

"Dante Quintana discovers this by being the one who helps decode Aristotle's universe piece by piece, sometimes without the intent to. Like when he showed Ari his sketch book, or when he stood in the road forcing Aristotle to save him from the oncoming car. When Dante was hurt in the alleyway. Many of the actions by Dante coerced emotions from Aristotle that may not have been wanted for the wrong reasons.

Mr. Soledad is able to prove this theme even further by finally showing Ari his true self. For finally being able to uncover the things that have been troubling him for a few years."

As you can see, I'm incredibly weak in this field of English writing. I can improve by "sucking it up" and "ceasing to be lazy" (thanks Maran for helping me with that grammar).

I can set aside a time to analyze the evidence I want to cite before starting the essay and choose evidence that supports my claim.

Then I can put quality citing websites in my bookmarks so they're easily accessible.

Finally I can actually put effort into it. Like have my mom remind me and encourage me to do quality work on my homework/projects. Have friends proofread my essays and work so it's good for grading.

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