My Portfolio Laryssa Thompson

About me

My name is Laryssa Thompson, I am 21 years old and originally from New Jersey. I joined the military at 17 years old in 2013 when I graduated from high school, and my life hasn't been the same ever since. For the first time I was seeing the world from a different perspective, I was confined to rules that I didn't have a choice if I wanted to follow them or not. I swore in July 29,2013 and haven't looked back ever since. The military helped me become the woman I am today, and most importantly I was able to meet my amazing husband who gave me the best thing a woman could ever ask for, our son Jordan. Hawaii had been my home since 2013, where me and my husband were stationed and It was the most magical place to live. My career in the military was great, but I had gotten injured while serving and decided that my health was more important to me so that I could make sure that I could be present in Jordan's life to the full extent. With many surgeries along my journey, I had come to realize the importance of health care providers. The kind nurses that helped me with my recovery truly touched my heart, and that was when I realized that I wanted to do the same for others. Although I knew what I wanted to do, I had fears of failure. My most prominent fear was of adapting to becoming a civilian. This semester helped me in every aspect, these last 16 weeks have helped me take control of my responsibilities. It was very hard at first not having a NCO telling you everything you have to do and how to go about doing it. It was 16 weeks of finding myself, the Laryssa I once was and what were my learning methods. With the help of my supportive husband and a smile of an angel that I am trying to make proud, I have been able to push myself to my full capacity. I reminded myself that I can do anything I set my mind to and as long as I work a little harder I can overcome any obstacle.

Reflective Essay

When I first imagined going back to an English class after four years of a break from school, I was not prepared for the challenges I was yet to face. In high school you aren’t taught the same format that college teachers require from you, and once I learned that my anxiety had shot up to an ultimate high. I always struggled with starting my essays and what to write about, my biggest difficulty would be the introduction but as soon as I got the flow I felt somewhat at ease. The second prevalent problems I faced were use of proper grammar and steering away from “text talk” which had completely consumed my way of writing and speaking. While the last sixteen weeks have been somewhat of a challenge each major essay helped me grow as a writer and helped me acquire many skill-sets that have set me up for success.

My evaluation essay is the essay that has taught me the most on the proper use of communication. Since it was the first essay I had written in years, I had to truly relearn the ability to write a paper and focus on how well I was putting my thoughts into words. This essay taught me how to properly use MLA format and how to find reliable sources, as well as how to apply it into my work. The evaluation essay pushed me to think outside of my comfort zone and pressed me to do research without using my personal view on the topic. The evaluation essay forced me to use all my resources to the full extent and the resource that I found the most useful was, Everyone's An Author book.

This evaluation essay was going to set the tone for me for the rest of the semester, so I took extra time truly analyzing the smallest details. I truly never had adapted steps that I followed for writing, but for the evaluation essay I made sure that I truly understood what the essay had to consist of and thoroughly analyzed the assignment sheet. After clearly reading the instruction I did research on what I had chosen to evaluate, the iPhone 7 Plus. I used the reliable sources I found during my research process and made a list of things I could evaluate the iPhone on. The list helped me have an idea of what my essay would consist of and after that step I just began to write. Getting my introduction started was probably the most difficult step I had, but after I began it was a flow.

The first draft I submitted had many mistakes, and some that I would have blindly ignored if Professor Bevill had not corrected them during her revision. I had never imagined that my essay would be full of missing commas, improper citation, and improper articles and after analyzing the corrections I had to make it gave me a better understanding of use of proper communication. These were all skills I didn't even think I had issues with until this essay. After correcting the mistakes in my essay I submitted it for peer review, that step was also a crucial step in perfecting my essay. Peer review gave me the help I needed to clean up minor mistakes and reminded me that I still needed to make correction on my "works cited page". Everyone's An Author book truly guided me into perfecting my ability to make proper citations and a correct format for my works cited page, it guided me and gave me clear instructions that allowed me to succeed.

I was able to grow as a writer in the process of composing this essay, I was given insight that I carried with me throughout the whole semester. The evaluation essay truly helped me understand the process I needed to take to have clear and proper communication with the audience. I was able to learn many new things that I took forward into every other assignment we had. This class overall has helped me learn the importance of multiple drafts and revision from multiple peers, and I am truly grateful for all the things that English 1301 has taught. The evaluation essay and every other class work has helped me become better prepared for future classes and professional settings.

First Draft

Second Draft (Peer Review)

PS. Jordan helped with the peer review

Final Draft

Edited Final Draft

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