First-Year Seminar Portfolio Nicole murtsef

Introduction
Coming into college I knew I was going to have to adjust and learn new habits in order to succeed. First-Year Seminar taught me the skills that I needed. From writing a rough draft to creating a thesis, I now feel confident leaving this course and meeting other courses expectations for assignment. This class was a challenge and really made me work for my grade and that is what I believe is needed to adjust, to show that it isn't going to be easy and I wouldn't be able to slide by. Below are going to be examples of my progress throughout this course:
How a Rough Draft Can Improve Your Final Piece
Rough Draft Paragraph

During the PSA, the first thing you saw was the girl writing “fat” on the mirror. She then went to her computer and was looking at pictures of girls modeling in their bra and underwear. Already you can see the issue. A lot of people compare to models, which is unrealistic and not what the average person looks like. It is all photoshopped and edited. After looking through the models and destroying her self-esteem, she weighs and measures herself. Then you see her prepare a full size cookie tray filled with french fries and chicken tenders and witness her eat it while watching TV, unless it is a commercial. During a commercial, she will do push-ups, and run in place. She will grab her “fat” and then go to purge. You see her head go into the toilet and then write down “You’re pathetic, disgusting, fat, ugly”. This is the beginning stages to Bulimia. Constantly comparing, putting yourself down, and binging and purging, but more issues arise as you go on with the disorder. The girl begins to count calories and form a secret junk food stash in her room. The reason why the stash is a secret is because of shame. Nobody wants to make it public with what they are doing, they just become so depressed and obsessive with their weight that they can't help it. She purges again and she passes out. Her body became so weak from the lack of nutrients and over exercise. During the video after this happens, you think she makes a turn around because she wrote “eat” instead of writing “fat” and made herself a bowl of Mini Wheats and has a glass of water. Later on in the night she had fries that were in proportion. Then you would see laxatives next to the water and her crying. Her disorder completely transformed into a different one where she was using laxatives as a form of weight loss. It is a vicious cycle that is so hard to end. If you look throughout the internet you will see multiple PSA’s on eating disorders. People need to see that one disorder can lead into another and can be so harmful to the point where it can permanently damage your body and even become fatal. This is such a huge topic in PSA’s because it is caused by society. Recently though, companies like American Eagle Outfitters, who owns Aerie, a bra and undies line, started photoshooting their models in their natural state. Which means no extra editing to enhance “beauty”. They are really starting to crack down and show young girls to love you for you and that all models are not perfect, yet still beautiful. It takes companies like these to really make a difference. Just think, if more companies, especially higher end companies, mimicked what American Eagle did, society's views would change. We are so influenced by the media's perception to what is beautiful that our own values don't even matter. This is because we are so bent on living up to the expectations that media puts on society.

Final Draft Paragraph

During the PSA, the first thing you saw was the girl writing “fat” on the mirror. She then went to her computer and was looking at pictures of girls modeling in their bra and underwear. Already you can see the issue. A lot of people compare to models, which is unrealistic and not what the average person looks like. It is all photoshopped and edited. After looking through the models and destroying her self-esteem, she weighs and measures herself. Then you see her prepare a full size cookie tray filled with french fries and chicken tenders and witness her eat it while watching TV, unless it is a commercial. During a commercial, she will do push-ups, and run in place. She will grab her “fat” and then go to purge. You see her head go into the toilet and then write down “You’re pathetic, disgusting, fat, ugly”. This is the beginning stages to Bulimia. Constantly comparing, putting yourself down, and binging and purging, but more issues arise as you go on with the disorder. The girl begins to count calories and form a secret junk food stash in her room. The reason why the stash is a secret is because of shame. Nobody wants to make it public with what they are doing, they just become so depressed and obsessive with their weight that they can't help it. She purges again and she passes out. Her body became so weak from the lack of nutrients and over exercise. During the video after this happens, you think she makes a turn around because she wrote “eat” instead of writing “fat” and made herself a bowl of Mini Wheats and has a glass of water. Later on in the night she had fries that were in proportion. Then you would see laxatives next to the water and her crying. Her disorder completely transformed into a different one where she was using laxatives as a form of weight loss. It is a vicious cycle that is so hard to end.

If you look throughout the internet you will see multiple PSA’s on eating disorders. This one in particular though does a good job using rhetorical sensitivity. The film was graphic and showed a lot of examples. Anyone who knows someone with a disorder like this or once had it, would easily be able to relate and pick up the message. Even someone who has very basic knowledge would be able to catch on and see what damage is being caused here. The PSA sends a very important message to the audience. People need to see that one disorder can lead into another and can be so harmful to the point where it can permanently damage your body and even become fatal. This is such a huge topic in PSA’s because it is caused by society.

The Revolution of My Thesis
My First Thesis

"The message Leonard tries to send is very powerful and will make you think twice on what you consume throughout your life." (Summer essay: The Story of Stuff)

My Second Thesis

"This PSA does a good job displaying rhetorical sensitivity to its audience and shows that society needs to be aware of what is actually happening and show compassion and support and realize looks aren't everything." (Writing Assignment 1: Public Service Announcement)

My Third Thesis

"So the main point here is, the effect the media has on the incidence of Bulimia and if this has affected the mortality rate in the last ten years." (Writing Assignment 2: The Correlation between Eating Disorders and the Media)

How My PSA Came About
The process of making my Public Service Announcement (PSA) was lengthy, took a lot of hard work, and creativity. But after going through all of that, I was very pleased with my outcome and the message I was trying to give the audience, how social media influences eating disorders.
The Storyboard
I had to create a storyboard, which basically planned out my whole project and what I was going to discuss in it. Below are going to be some examples of what was in my storyboard:
  • Initial situation: How the use of social media has risen over the years and how it has become apart of our everyday lives. 8/10 teenagers aged 12-17 use social media and 67% of them use social media daily. We are constantly on our phones and computers, it is always made available to us.
  • First signs of problem: There are online communities supporting eating disorders and encouraging it. They tend to be very common among social media networks but recently have decreased. It was brought to attention to the people who run the apps and they started banning certain hashtags and pages. But that didn’t stop people. They created hashtags with the same meaning but with different spelling and new pages. Also, you constantly see others that you may think is better looking than you and you can become insecure and feel pressured to be like them.
  • Rising action: Constantly viewing images can make us feel worse and seeing online communities encouraging eating disorders can make one think it is okay and the solution to looking “beautiful”. Although eating disorders are a mental disorder that gets triggered by many different factors, this can greatly be one of the factors.
  • Climax: An eating disorder is developed and carried out. There is harm being put on the body and loved ones surrounded.
  • Resolution: Try and limit what type of social media you follow to prevent this from happening. The media can be very influencing and even if you don’t think it can happen to you, it can. Along with being careful what you post because it can affect others in a negative way.
  • Pitch: Be careful with what you post to social media because it can harm you or others in the long run.
The Script
I created a script so I knew what I was going to say during each slide of my presentation. The reason behind was so that I was well prepared on what I was going to say and to prevent any "uhs" and freezes. Below is an example of something that was on my script:

Slide Two: This is a good example on how social media, such as instagram, which greatly increased in 2016, can influence someone that the skinnier you are, the prettier you are. The pictures posted are from people who obtain eating disorders that hashtag different eating disorder communities. The hashtags used in these two pictures are “#ana”, “#disgustingbody”, “#disgustingfood”, “#thinspo”, and “#thighgap”. The people within the communities all share a similar issue and encourage one another to keep it up in order to get the results they want. This can cause lower self esteem, depression, and the acceptance of an eating disorder. Frequently seeing this can brainwash you into thinking you aren't good enough.

The Final Piece
After creating both my storyboard and script, I was able to make my final piece which was my PSA. I used Google Slides and Quicktime. On my slideshow I put a titles and pictures on each slide. I used Quicktime to record my voice over the presentation explaining the photos and the meaning behind the title. It was like standing up giving a presentation to the class, only virtually.

Credits:

Created with images by rhodesj - "Studying" • Moyan_Brenn - "Study" • crdotx - "Writing? Yeah." • B.S. Wise - "the handwriting of lillie coit" • ChrisA1995 - "Nature" • DariuszSankowski - "old retro antique" • eelke dekker - "Script" • .Elisa. - "nature"

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