Lusa's Final Portfolio BOnding with horses

Welcome to my English 1001 - A final portfolio. My name is Lusa Olle, a equestrian rider who attends Centenary University. Throughout my semester, I have completed many assignments, learned more about horses than I could imagine and grew as a rider. Here is my work from the semester.

Personal Narrative -

For my final project I decided to write about my personal experiences with horses and how they affected and shaped my life as a person and a rider. In this project I touched on how I started my riding career at a young age and how it taught me to bond with horses so training and competitions will be easier. Becoming an equestrian rider has also taught me a lot in the appreciation of the sport and the effort that is put into it through the trainer, rider and horse.

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Rhetorical Analysis -

For this part of the project I discussed the article I read called ,"How Do I Bond With My Horse" by Kathrine Blocksdorf, that talks about the bonding with horses. How feeding, walking, riding, grooming all creates bonds between the horse and the rider just as feeding and nurturing creates a bond with people like infants and mothers.

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Research Assignment -

For this section I looked for many different sources that would help me with my final paper. Sources ranges from writings that trainers wrote, to professionals in the fields of animal behavior, like zoologists.

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Strategy Project -

This section talks about my project and how I am planning on presenting it. Here outlines the way I want to presents it.

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Blog Posts

Nancy Sommers believes that revision is a lost art among writers because many people spend more time believing that the two models of writing that exist focus on no revision stage. The models of Gordon Rohman and James Britton teach us that people prewrite, write and rewrite or they conceive, incubate, and produce their pieces. These models fail to consider the “linear structure of language” since these models are based on modes focusing on speech which does not allow for revision. According to Rohman, “the spoken word cannot be revised” (45). Sommers believes though, that when something is written it is a recorded piece of evidence and therefore can be changed.

To that end, Nancy Sommers explores the writing of inexperienced college freshmen and experienced professional writers to see if their writing strategies are different. Each group had their own style. She explored the four revision operations: delete, substitute, add, and reorder and found that the experienced writers took more time to revise than the inexperienced writers.

Some of the examples show that the experienced writers are not as timid to use deletion, substitution, addition and rewording things. Also they are able to find new reasons and points to their own writing. The less experienced writers are more hesitant to the revision process. It more difficult for them to understand to be ok with making changes and creating new ideas because they are more than to hold a grudge of how they written their writing in their own way. Overall to sum it up, more experienced writers know who they are writing to and are able to take harsh feedback from other writers, than the less experienced writers who still struggle with how to be able to open up to other people’s thoughts or allowing to be creative in other ways in the writing process.

When I write, I can definitely relate to the less experienced writers because I am a person to try to make things “perfection”. I am not a person to allow a lot of people to look at my writing and have them change all of my work or tell me other critics. This year I feel like I am becoming more able to open up for more help and advice because we are writing a lot through this semester. When we peer review I am a little hesitant to allow my peers to critique me because we all have different opinions. But I have learned to allow it more recently because it is a part of our grade. My other option that’s been helpful is I work with a tutor to help me give me more advice and be more relaxed with my writing, since she is a professional in the field.

Writing a draft has always helped me with my writing. It helps create thoughts I can put down and later change if it does not work or if I want to elaborate more on that thought. Even if my rough draft is so horrible I can always go back to it and edit it. I really like having the stage of having to write a rough draft because I know I can be more relaxed about my writing, it does not have to be any where near perfect. I can always have some one look at it and make comments on it before I finalize it. I am not a huge fan of writing myself, but I know if I can get something down on paper I feel more confident to finish the rest of it. I am a perfectionist to everything so its hard for to make it perfect, but I tell my self there is a reason for rough drafts because there not perfect. Majority of the time I feel like I get writers block, but since it is a rough draft I know I can put any thought down even if I like it or not and can go back and change it.

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