By collaboratively using Microsoft OneNote to bounce ideas back and forth, Sam and I began working on the script.
We also used Facebook Messenger to discuss ideas. A snap shot of our conversation can be seen below.
Just as each paragraph in Ballard's The Atrocity Exhibition (1970) could stand alone, we aimed to create a similar effect in our essay film.
To start with, we number observations 1-18. We then began noting down points of interest, against each number, ensuring to include current themes and topics, but also ordinary observations.
Once we had 18 ideas, we developed them further, trying to reflect the poetic language found in other essay film examples.
Once the script was complete, we mixed each observation around to build the final order; creating a disordered view of the worlds.
Once the script had been completed, I sent it to the rest of the group to get their opinions. It was later uploaded to the Blog.
See below for our final script:
Blog Post from December 9th:
SCRIPT – TEAM JESS
Taking our inspiration from Sans Soleil (Marker, 1983) and The Atrocity Exhibition (Ballard, 1970), Sam and I collaboratively put together the following script.
(The titles will not be included in the spoken narrative, they are purely for our reference and understanding.)
Introduction : My name is Julia Hegenbert, I’m 23 years old and I come from the year 2086. It is the year 2016. I have come back to observe this specific year in human history, to find out what caused our downfall. The following are my observations.
Observation 6: bees dying
The 6 o’clock news reported that the bee is becoming extinct. Flowers and trees, fruit and vegetables, are all slowly dying because the bee’s sensitive ecosystem has been disturbed by humans.
Observation 11: Bustling streets
Every day the streets are busy. Men, women and children hurriedly weave around each other, creating a temporary tapestry of life.
Observation 1: Brexit
A once powerful Britain stands divided as they vote on whether to leave the European Union. A simple election gives nationalists and far right movements the opportunity to rise up and live out their inhumane fantasies; atrocities that are seen by children, too young to understand, and the elderly, who have already been through this before.
Observation 5: Polluted air
I have seen the people of China having to cover their mouths in order to survive, avoiding the avalanches made of metal, rubber and liquidised fossils. The smog lies on the cities like an ominous layer of black fog, as thick and opaque as tar.
Observation 12: The sea
The sea lightly laps on the shore line, bringing with it the fresh salt smell that reminds me of my childhood. The blue colours move in gentle waves, creating a feeling of serenity for miles around.
Observation 14: War
This planet is far from achieving world peace. Inhumane wars are raging on, fuelled by hatred, greed and profit.
Observation 18: A car
Like a species of ant, much inferior to the actual insect, cars roam and obstruct the streets. They spout chemicals into the air, and burn fossil fuels that have been violently stolen from mother earth’s soil.
Observation 2: Trump
2016 is the year of radical leaders. Great Britain’s teenage rebellion of June 23rd seems almost forgotten now that Trump has been elected. America has chosen to follow the example of the British, with its neo nationalism and bigotry, by electing a man that has controversially spoken out about minorities.
Observation 4: A flower
Today, I observed a flower opening its petals for the first time and reaching itself towards the sun; flourishing in its new life. It was beautiful.
Observation 7: Polluted water/ fish dying
The once clear blue waters of earth have turned brown and black. Polluted with plastic and chemicals, it kills the fish within and all of nature outside the waters.
Observation 16: The countryside
The carefully manipulated land stretches for miles around. Hedge rows and fields, bright green in colour, provide a place to connect with nature.
Observation 3: Global warming
Today, I witnessed people denying the existence of global warming. People of this century fail to believe the extent to which they are destroying the Earth. Global warming is very present, the news inform citizens about it, but most of the populace of earth does not seem to care that the poles are melting, or that the oceans are heating up. They don’t recognise the death and destruction that is brought with it.
Observation 9: Deforestation – extinction of animal species/endangering orangoutangs
Trees, the lungs of earth, get chopped down on a large scale every day. Robbing animals of their homes, the soil from its nutrition, and the air from the oxygen it needs.
Observation 15: Unwelcome refugees
I’m afraid that today I watched hundreds of people turned away from Britain’s borders. A sense of despair, and a loss of hope filtered through the crowds. No one was willing to help.
Observation 10: A mother’s love
A child skipped through the streets. Clumsily stepping. Falling. And then followed by tears. The mother calmly enveloped the child with her sheer divine graciousness: A Gesture of Love.
Observation 17: A phone
As I looked around at the people of 2016, I noticed that they carry a smartphone with them at all times. They seem more interested in the screens of these phones than anything going on around them.
Observation 13: frequent killing sprees in the US
The constitutional rights in the United States seem to cause problems among its citizens. The right to own a fire arm has cost many innocent people’s lives as lost souls have descended into insanity.
Observation 8: so called 3rd world countries – people dying from malnutrition
There are still countries that suffer from malnutrition. Humans let their own kind die from starvation, while countless amounts of food gets disposed of every day, just because it does not look picture perfect.