Final Digital Portfolio Grace sullivan

Throughout this semester, my writing has definitely grown a lot. It started out clearly at a high school level, and I believe that now it is at least better than that. The things I have seen that had the most growth were my thesis statements and purpose, and my summaries.

Thesis statements and Purpose

The PSA I chose was a commercial by the Center for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC). It was one of their many anti-smoking campaign ads, this one was Amanda’s story. In the commercial, Amanda talks about how smoking while pregnant caused her baby to be born two months early, and weigh only three pounds. Her baby was in the NICU and Amanda had to speak to her baby through an opening in the bed the baby was in. At the end of the ad, the CDC tells the viewers they can quit smoking and gives their web address for free help on how to quit.

As you can tell by this introduction paragraph, my first writing draft did not even have a thesis statement and my purpose of writing was not clear at all.

The PSA I chose was a commercial by the Center for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC). It was one of their many anti-smoking campaign ads, this one was Amanda’s story. The authors were very effective in their use of rhetoric and persuasion. This ad caught my attention because because smoking has affected the health of many of my relatives and, babies should not have to be hurt by their decisions. In the commercial, Amanda talks about how smoking while pregnant caused her baby to be born two months early, and weigh only three pounds. Her baby was in the NICU and Amanda had to speak to her baby through an opening in the bed the baby was in. At the end of the ad, the CDC tells the viewers they can quit smoking and gives their web address for free help on how to quit. This PSA by the Center for Disease Control and Prevention is a commercial ad that successfully depicts the dangers of smoking while pregnant and provides an outlet to get help.

After revising, and hearing feedback from peers and Dr. Terrizzi, this was the intro from my final WA1. I made somewhat of a thesis statement, but it's still not strong and the purpose is not clear.

Obesity is, and has been a growing problem in the United States. Stress is so common, to not be stressed out every once in awhile would be rare. Both of these things can affect people of all ages, races, religions, etc. Being obese might cause a person more stress, and many even eat more when they are stressed as a coping mechanism which is dangerous game to play because of all the excess fat intake combined with stress hormones is not good for a person. Stress is directly related to, and can cause obesity.

This is the intro for my final WA2. I think this shows improvement in my writing and even though it is shorter, I actually have a thesis statement and purpose to the writing.

Summaries

While reading through my summaries, I noticed that they improved a lot and it took a little while for me to get the length of the summaries right.

This chapter is about reading text on screens vs in print. It talks about how the way we read things is changing and increasingly becoming on screen reading while a couple years ago, everything was mainly in print. The way we as a society read and write is changing because of technology, but is that a good thing and is it beneficial is a big question. This chapter also talks about rhetoric again because it is so important to understand how to communicate in different scenarios with different people. It mentions the reader, writer, text, and medium and how they influence our reading/writing/preferences/experiences.

This is one of my first Ede summaries, and it lacks a lot of the important concepts that were actually discussed in the reading.

In chapter 12, Ede talks about drafting. Throughout the chapter, there is a main point that everyone's writing process is different, and so not one method of drafting will suit everyone. While drafting, it is important to have a working thesis, this helps a writer develop their ideas and focus on what they're writing about. Ede also makes it clear that drafts can be messy, they don't have to be perfect at all, they just have to give the writer a good sense of where their paper is going =, and get their ideas and thoughts down. It's important to have a workable plan though, just so the writer has some type of guideline for themselves to follow, this can be an outline, notes, diagrams, etc. Every writer experiences resistance, but they have to overcome them and keep their momentum going until you get to a natural stopping point.

This is one of my last summaries, as you can tell, this summary is more developed and contains more information, while still being concise.

My writing has significantly improved thanks to Dr. Terrizzi, Courtney, and all my peers who have edited my work along the way.

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